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==First (instructor) evaulation comments== | |||
Hi Mandy, | |||
Here are some suggestions for further improvements to your encyclopedia entry draft: | |||
* The timeline at the start of the "History" section is a useful resources, but it might be better off in an (optional) "Timeslines" subpage instead of the main article page. Same goes for the lists of former officers, which can go in a "Catalogs" subpage. Let me know if you want me to help set all that up. | |||
* While the "Founding" section does a good job of explaining how the Springfield race riot prompted the creation of the NAACP, you might provide more historical context about American race relations in general at the turn of the 20th century. Similarly, you might provide a little more explanation about things like who du Bois was or where Bloomington is for readers who are not already familiar. | |||
* Rather than a single "Events" subsection for all of the NAACP's history since its founding, you might consider a series of subsections, arranged either chronologically or thematically. Ideally, the "History" section would go all the way up to the present day, thus leading logically into the next, "Current objectives and activities" section. | |||
* Very interesting discussion of the NAACP's efforts to ensure positive media portrayals of African Americans, though you might consider condensing it into a single paragraph or give it a subsection heading to make it clear that all of those paragraphs are devoted to that same objective. If you're feeling ambitious, you might develop similar discussions about other ongoing campaigns. | |||
* Rather than simply list the organization's officers in the "Organizational Structure" section, you might explain a bit about what all those positions are and how they relate to each other and to the operation of the NAACP. | |||
* The "Achievements" section looks like it's off to a good start, though you might clarify (either there or in the "history" section) that litigation has traditionally been the NAACP's primary modus operandi for achieving its goals, which would help contextualize all the discussion of court cases you have there. You might also clarify that the ''Plessy'' decision was rendered before the NAACP was created (in 1896), though it did form the legal backdrop for the cases it participated in from the 1910s through ''Brown v. Board of Ed.'' | |||
* Throughout the entry, you might put key terms in double square brackets (i.e. [[ ]] ) to create links to related Citizendium articles; e.g., [[W.E.B. du Bois]], [[Niagara Movement]], [[Jim Crow]]. | |||
* Finally, don't forget to fill out the required subpages -- bibliography, related articles, and external links. | |||
Nice work overall! | |||
[[User:Shamira Gelbman|Shamira Gelbman]] 02:23, 8 October 2009 (UTC) | |||
==Second (peer) evaluation comments== |
Revision as of 21:23, 7 October 2009
First (instructor) evaulation comments
Hi Mandy,
Here are some suggestions for further improvements to your encyclopedia entry draft:
- The timeline at the start of the "History" section is a useful resources, but it might be better off in an (optional) "Timeslines" subpage instead of the main article page. Same goes for the lists of former officers, which can go in a "Catalogs" subpage. Let me know if you want me to help set all that up.
- While the "Founding" section does a good job of explaining how the Springfield race riot prompted the creation of the NAACP, you might provide more historical context about American race relations in general at the turn of the 20th century. Similarly, you might provide a little more explanation about things like who du Bois was or where Bloomington is for readers who are not already familiar.
- Rather than a single "Events" subsection for all of the NAACP's history since its founding, you might consider a series of subsections, arranged either chronologically or thematically. Ideally, the "History" section would go all the way up to the present day, thus leading logically into the next, "Current objectives and activities" section.
- Very interesting discussion of the NAACP's efforts to ensure positive media portrayals of African Americans, though you might consider condensing it into a single paragraph or give it a subsection heading to make it clear that all of those paragraphs are devoted to that same objective. If you're feeling ambitious, you might develop similar discussions about other ongoing campaigns.
- Rather than simply list the organization's officers in the "Organizational Structure" section, you might explain a bit about what all those positions are and how they relate to each other and to the operation of the NAACP.
- The "Achievements" section looks like it's off to a good start, though you might clarify (either there or in the "history" section) that litigation has traditionally been the NAACP's primary modus operandi for achieving its goals, which would help contextualize all the discussion of court cases you have there. You might also clarify that the Plessy decision was rendered before the NAACP was created (in 1896), though it did form the legal backdrop for the cases it participated in from the 1910s through Brown v. Board of Ed.
- Throughout the entry, you might put key terms in double square brackets (i.e. [[ ]] ) to create links to related Citizendium articles; e.g., W.E.B. du Bois, Niagara Movement, Jim Crow.
- Finally, don't forget to fill out the required subpages -- bibliography, related articles, and external links.
Nice work overall!
Shamira Gelbman 02:23, 8 October 2009 (UTC)
Second (peer) evaluation comments
Categories:
- Article with Definition
- Politics Category Check
- History Category Check
- Sociology Category Check
- Stub Articles
- Internal Articles
- Politics Stub Articles
- Politics Internal Articles
- History Stub Articles
- History Internal Articles
- Sociology Stub Articles
- Sociology Internal Articles
- Politics Underlinked Articles
- Underlinked Articles
- History Underlinked Articles
- Sociology Underlinked Articles
- History tag
- African American tag