Talk:Diabesity

Charlie Player 20:00, 13 October 2009 (UTC) Nicholas Devlin 11:21, 14 October 2009 (UTC)

John Park 12:08, 20 October 2009 (UTC)

Luke, good start, remember to update the bibliography page with your key readings. John, nice selection too. Charlie and Nicholas, im looking forward to read your contribution! Celine Caquineau 09:52, 14 October 2009 (UTC)

John Park GUYS!!!! we need input! I dont want to sound pedantic but getting a wee bit worried about how we are going to write this up. We need to meet up I think, and organise on structure. What each is going to write. etc.

I've put up a brief intro. I know its not very good but at least its a start. I was thinking Diabesity -

Intro - (the increasing trend of obesity, and the huge increase in rates of diabetes )

The relationship between Diabetes and Obesity (causal evidence and studies etc)

The Pathophysiology of how obesity can lead to Diabetes (maybe your bit Luke plus other things)

Treatments

Future work

Collaborations (e.g. Diabesity the EU project etc)

Just a start. !!!! But suggestions please!!!

Katie Rowland 08:26, 20 October 2009 (UTC) Hey everyone,sorry Ive only just got on - only got my account thing activated this morning! I agree we need to get things going, should we meet up to discuss? Or just split the sections? Im happy with that plan John, Im happy to do a section on treatment if no-one else has done that yet? Read the intro you did John and its a great start.

Welcome to Citizendium Katie. John, I think your plan looks really good. Still waiting for Charlie's and Nicholas' inputs... Nancy Sabatier 09:29, 20 October 2009 (UTC)

Katie Rowland 09:32, 20 October 2009 (UTC)I've put in some references for my bibliography section - as I don't know what im supposed to be doing Ive gone along the treatment line - if this is wrong just let me know asap! Also are our review and primary research papers supposed to be put on seperatly in different sections?

Katie, you need indeed to place your references in the appropriate 'reviews' or 'research papers' sections.Celine Caquineau 13:37, 21 October 2009 (UTC)

Overall, I agree with John and Katie, you need to discuss your plan (nice start John)! I encourage you to meet or at least use the talkpage. Luke, you've written your section but you still need to participate in the overall structure and organisation of the article. You also have to update the bibliography page with your references. Charlie and Nicholas, your group need your contributions!!! Charlie, I need to know whether you're still here! Celine Caquineau 13:37, 21 October 2009 (UTC)

I am sorry I have not been on here for a while. I ahve been doing some research into visceral fat deposition, insulin resistance leading to type 2 diabetes. I will put up a draft on Sunday hopefully. I agree we should meet up. When are people free? Charlie Player 13:58, 21 October 2009 (UTC)

Katie Rowland 10:03, 22 October 2009 (UTC) Ive put my very rough draft for the treatment section up, left the references in there as thought we could sort out references out after we have everything up? I think meeting up is a good idea, how about after the app and ob lecture on tueday?

A lot of info, well done guys. Just thinking in the last paragraph you could maybe put in a couple of links to the drugs page e.g for orlistat, some of the diabetic drugs. Only a suggestiong though! Rachael Kirkbride

Feedback on your article so far

You’ve already got quite a lot here, well done. Your plan is pretty good, although you still don’t seem to have a clear idea of what to put in Section 1. In the introduction you give a definition and background for the concept of Diabesity, which is really good, but I think you really need to define in a few words what type-2 diabetes is at some point too. That could come with a brief reminder of how glucose concentration is regulated in the body, maybe with a simple diagram showing the basic principles of glucose homeostasis (just a suggestion).

The paragraph on Visceral Fat is well documented and again, there’s been quite a lot of work put into it, however, I found it quite difficult to read mainly because of the numerous abbreviations, some of which haven’t even been defined (FFAs, TG, VLDL, LDL, HDL). Remember that Citizendium articles should be understandable to a general public. I know this is still a rough draft but this section will need to be easier to read. Sections on Causes of diabetes: again, good work here but a complete lack of references, remember to add them in the text.

From your Talk page, it appears that some of you made some effort to interact, and give each other inputs. However, Luke has not signed in for ages and seems to have totally disappeared once his contribution has been downloaded. This is not what we expected from you, one of the main objectives of this tutorial is about team work, it is as important as the content of the article itself. So Luke please come back on this page! And Hannah, Celine told me that you joined this group, where are you??

Finally, as Rachael rightly pointed out, your last paragraph has obvious links with the Drug Treatment for Obesity article, so I suggest that you don’t develop it as much but instead refer to that other article. Remember to have a look at what the other groups have done. Nancy Sabatier 14:39, 28 October 2009 (UTC)

In reference to having more discussion on drug therapies, there are a number of potential drug targets and treatments that are currently being translated from the animal model findings.

Nick, you're lots of good stuff on how ER stress causes diabetes, but how does obesity affect ER stress? Luke Kennedy Burke

I agree with Nancy, I can see a lot of work has been done. Diabesity is a vast theme and your introduction should have the key role of stating what are the direction and focus of your article. It should also provide links between the different sections, for the moment it looks a bit too much like several articles rather than one. I also think that you should define key terms like type-2 diabetes by providing links with other articles done in citizendium (Have a look at Diabetes mellitus type 2). It reads well but don’t overuse abbreviations. I suggest you now remove any left-overs from the original template to facilitate the reading. Studies and facts should be referenced in the text and in the ‘References’ section at the end of the article, using the Citizendium references format, I’ve done an example in 'visceral fat' part, so you can have a look how it’s done. The bibliography page needs to be updated accordingly. Finally, Im glad to see that you are already using the talkpage a bit more, I can only encourage you to interact more by commenting on what’s been done and what is left to do; you’ve done loads but there is still a fair amount to do! I have no doubt that you‘ll produce a really good article but all of you need to give inputs now! Celine Caquineau 11:15, 29 October 2009 (UTC)